Comments : Blinding

  • 6 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    I honestly loved the earlier parts. The parts towards the end (last four lines) seem to be detached or do not connect well with the rest of the poem. Also, even though I understand the last line has to rhyme I think that it is a very weak ending...I hope you don't misinterpret me. :-) This poem could do a revision, I do believe it is great, but can even be greater.