Comments : The Woman He Likes but Does Not Love

  • 9 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    Awww. A sad place to be. Lovely opening lines, 'someone else's commitment between your legs'... These are very strong lines also:
    'A woman that maybe he likes, but does not love; there for him when he does not like the woman he loves. '

    I felt it, a good write.

    • 9 months ago

      by Someone Invisible

      Thank you, if it weren't for the fact that it's about me, the lines about being a liked but not loved woman, there when he doesn't like the loved woman, would be a favorite line of mine. Thank you for the comments.

  • 9 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Blunt, honest and so very true.

    How did you find yourself flat on your back with someone elses commitment between your legs?
    ^^

    Fabulous opening to the piece.

    All the best,

    Ben

    • 9 months ago

      by Someone Invisible

      It is pretty blunt, no? Heh heh I was mad when I wrote it. Maybe when I've gotten some distance I can go back and rewrite it to flow like ifeel a poem should, but this is face value for now. Thank you for the review, Ben. :)

  • 9 months ago

    by Brenda

    Wow, right to the point on that opening..interesting perspective on being "that" person. I liked this...

    • 9 months ago

      by Someone Invisible

      Thank you kindly ma'am. It's an interesting experience being "that" person. And not interesting in a good, fun way. It's a daily struggle with myself on choosing to be a "good" person or continuing to allow this scenario to go on. So far, I've stayed selfish.

  • 9 months ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    This is very powerful and interesting, and awfully common I suspect. Is it ever possible to have the sex without any emotion though? Very thought provoking, and the first two lines are just genius! :-) x
    =^.^=

    • 9 months ago

      by Someone Invisible

      I never thought i would allow myself to be in this position before. I feel terrible for all off us, guilty to her, sad for him, and just shitty for myself. Lol Im a selfish human being right now though, and I'm not ready to release him yet. I hope this isn't too common because it's definitely a painful way to love some body. Thank you for stopping to read it.

  • 6 months ago

    by Phoenix ¥

    Really good poem, I can feel the hurt,anger and confusion within you.i can also relate to your comments. Good luck! X