Between Stars

by Ben   Dec 7, 2017


It used to be, when we kissed
the world fell away,
hearts were full and nothing mattered
as long as we had each other,
now, we fall away,
from each other,
I’ve danced to this song before
and the tempo feels the same,
The notes feel similar,
and I hope, more than ever
that this intuition is way off….

Because the gaps between the stars
are cold when I’m alone.

    report violation
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  • 4 months ago

    by ddavidd

    Such gentle assembling of words. You remind me of the other Ben who left us.
    Oh how much more I would enjoy if you finished it by "when I am not with you" instead. For me that, would give more ability to relate to the concept of coldness.
    But it is only me. Everyone has his own taste. The piece is already perfect on its own.

    • 4 months ago

      by Ben

      Sir David, thank you for taking the time and your lovely comments :)

  • 4 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    This is the kind of poem that leaves a mark somewhere, just so beautiful and the sadness in here is captivating, expressed in a beautiful tone.

    • 4 months ago

      by Ben

      thankyou MG :) there is often beauty in sadness and sadness in beauty....this is why I love to write, to be able to express it so that others can "feel" it too is an accomplishment.

  • 4 months ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    Oh that awful sinking feeling when your intuition is ringing the alarm bells in your head. This is so good Ben, so beautifully expressed. :-) x
    =^.^=

    • 4 months ago

      by Ben

      I'm glad you enjoyed Kitty! ;)

  • 4 months ago

    by Brenda

    Ben, nicely done. It's hard when you know it's over, that feelings gone. A,sad write indeed.

    • 4 months ago

      by Ben

      It can be a tremendous effort to overcome and conquer these feelings, writing helps and rum helps more ;)

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