When I read this I think of our local sugarcane workers here. Yes, working in the fields is really hard work and they are paid only around $2 a day. They are our unsung heroes as our sugar industry wouldn't survive without them. Great poem.
A hard life indeed, and not one I would like to live. Yet for the most part they are happy.
Up with the birds and often to sleep long after. Yeah they can make a bloody good living, but their down time is minimal.
Oh and oh my god the smell lol.
Thanks Bren, hope ya'll had an amazing Crimbo time.
8 months ago
by Ben Pickard
Excellent poem, Craig. My only suggestion would be to change 'They work so hard well into the dark' to 'They work so hard, well into dark.' It still makes sense but by dropping the 'the' I feel it flows a little more smoothly there. Apart from that, the rhyming is effortless.