Comments : Touching on a nerve

  • 6 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    More people need to read this. Such an excellent write. We are all people and only one life to live. At the end there is one race called human. All the very best

  • 6 years ago

    by Michael

    Patrick,

    A really interesting read of your perspective.
    Third line (second verse) should it read 'I am' or 'A'
    Enjoyed this
    Michael :)

    • 6 years ago

      by patrick

      thanks i have done the edit

  • 6 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    An interesting thought provoking poem. With a different view on life and death. You do raise some interesting points but I disagree with your last line that we all hate. There are people in this world who do hate and this can cause them to perpetuate crimes but for many people it is not an emotion they ever feel. Best wishes Milly x

  • 6 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    Such a thought provoking write Patrick! I enjoyed the read and I especially love the 3rd stanza, it is so cleverly put. Great write here.

    • 6 years ago

      by Nicholosa Torres

      Indeed very well written, but no agree to very last line. "But we hate!" For I think hate is a hard word to describe what's been said. But very good nonetheless