Comments : Diary Of A Serial Killer (part 1)

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Maple Tree

    Are you related to Poe? My gawd Ben, I'm speechless and proud of you....you turned evil into a poetic masterpiece.... truly!

    • 2 weeks ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks, Andrea, but unfortunately I am not...

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Em

    This is so very powerful yet beautiful

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Jamie

    A nadmans delight :). I absolutely love the imagery and rhyming in this. They mix so well together

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Brenda

    Ben, what a write! I agree with Andrea, I think you might be related to Poe. This is so dark, so twisted and so beautifully written. Well done my friend, well done-

    • 2 weeks ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Many thanks, Brenda, although I suppose I should just assure everyone that this is pure fiction!

  • 2 weeks ago

    by mossgirl19

    Whoa. Yay! This is literally bloody, Ben. Omg, this is just fantastic. It gave me the creeps as I can see the serial killer while reading and I pity her very much.

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    Ew and wow Ben! That's some twisty journey you've taken us on. To have the imagination to get inside the head of such a person is really awe inspiring. I hope you're rightfully very proud of this. Bloody well done! :-) x
    =^.^=

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Tony

    Deliciously devious. Eagerly awaiting part 2.

    • 2 weeks ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks, Tony. part 2 is a work in progress.

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Can't wait to read part two. Awesome work Ben. All the best

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Ren

    Woah...

    What a terrifyingly entrancing write, Ben! I kinda had to peek over my shoulder a few times while reading this...got that eerie feeling...that suspense...

    You're an amazing story teller, and your rhyming is flawless, as always.

    Looking forward to part two...*glances over shoulder....*

    • 2 weeks ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Yes, I'm right there behind you, Ren, lol.
      Take care and many thanks for reading.

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Poetess

    Well, damn.
    I'm a fan of dark horror, serial killer kinda books, so this is going to my favorites. Lol

    • 2 weeks ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you, Liz - I'll remember to steer clear should our paths ever cross, lol

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Wow... A teacher once told me that it is much harder than it looks to write horror because you have to get the details just right. You have absolutely nailed the horror content and imagery. A superb piece. Best wishes Milly x

    • 2 weeks ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks Milly - happy new year, by the way

  • 2 weeks ago

    by yogi73

    very intense and well written...It's like Dr Seuss, but written by a serial killer, but I suspect that is parts of its charm.

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Stephanie

    I am scared too.
    real poetry

    • 2 weeks ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks for reading, Stephanie and sorry for scaring you!

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Beautiful Tragedy

    Wow Ben. This is intense...
    I’m at a loss for words right now.
    Well done

  • 1 week ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Benny
    currently playing catch up so I have just stumbled upon this lovely piece.
    HOLY EF BENNY! Not only are you sonnet King, you seem to be Horror King too. How about we just call you King of the poetry at this point!

    This piece is very Jack the Ripperish... with you being English, makes it a little more creepy.. :P Please dont tell me your some sort of time travelling Jack the Ripper who brings poems of the past!

    Back to the piece itself, very descriptive. At some points where you speak of tearing at her flesh (i dont know where my mind went!) but I pictured some sort of scavenger bird pecking at it. Such as a raven..

    I am now off to find part II and hope this is a continuing line of poetry.. As much as it creeps me out, you intrigue me..

    • 1 week ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you, Naomi. I thought I'd try something a little different...if not literal!