Comments : Make a Choice

  • 7 months ago

    by Michael

    Miss Milly,

    a wonderful rhyming piece with so much truth about our society, but there is love in this world. But sadly it can get forgotten or taken for granted.
    Great write
    Much love
    Michael :)x

    • 7 months ago

      by Milly Hayward

      Michael thank you so much for the nomination. There is so much darkness in the world today that we need to stop sometimes and remember that its individual acts and thoughts of kindness that help make great change in this world. All my best wishes Milly x

  • 7 months ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Milly this is absolutely beautiful and what an eye opener. Thank you for sharing. I wished more would focus on the positive things rather then destruction. Glad to see it was nominated. All the very best

    • 7 months ago

      by Milly Hayward

      Thank you Dagmar. I think it is too easy to become blasé about all the crimes and cruelties that go on but we each as individuals can all help towards making this a more pleasant world if we choose to do so. Much love Milly x

  • 7 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    I like the balance this strikes at the end: it isn't just a piece about how dreadful we are - it actually offers some sound and very sensible advice as to how we can make things better.
    Great rhyming poem, Milly.

    Ben

    • 7 months ago

      by Milly Hayward

      Ben, thank you for your lovely comments. I like to believe that for every problem there is a solution if we look hard enough. Milly x

  • 7 months ago

    by Brenda

    Love this Milly! Very relevant for today's society, well written, nicely rhymed and a lot of food for thought.

  • 7 months ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    Brilliant, both content and perfect rhyming Milly. It's a struggle sometimes, but I'm choosing the light! Love this! :-) x
    =^.^=

  • 7 months ago

    by Ya----Na

    Milly
    You always write powerful poems with perfect rhyming.
    You are right life's too short to dwell in the dark.

  • 7 months ago

    by gumshuda

    very right and true. this is beautiful

  • 7 months ago

    by Wuggleberry

    This is very nice

    • 7 months ago

      by Milly Hayward

      Thank you Wuggleberry best wishes Millyx

  • 7 months ago

    by Jamie

    Milly, i do love the rhyming and structure of this poem. The meaning is what i think a lot of people think about but never have the words to say.

    The rhyming is not forced at all and it flows with the poem well. A lot of times it is difficult to use the rhyming structure "aaaa"- as in all the last words of each line rhymes, but you did it well to not interupt the poem itself.

    I do love 4 stanzas per line in a poem because it gives the reader a lot to work with. Usually in a longer poem the writer sometimes goes off track and writes something that doesn't go along with the poem itself. I think you did great to keep on topic.

    The poem itself is filled with a few different emotions in my opinion. The beginning seems to be filled with frustration at the world and all the hate and negative it is filled with, but as you go deeper into the poem, it becomes more and more positive and it feels like you are truly speaking from your heart and i as the read believe what you say is true.

    This really is a thought provoking poem because you give the reader what (you) as the writer feels and it makes me think about how i should feel about this topic.

    We should all come together as one and make this world a better place, despite our differences is what i believe the core of the poem means. Well done.

  • 7 months ago

    by Lemon Squeezy

    Fantastic write! We all have this choice between good and bad, right and wrong every single day. I enjoyed this piece very much. Well done!

  • 7 months ago

    by Em (marmite)

    Milly this is a very thought provoking, truthful and raw piece which makes you look at things a little more differently that yes there seems to be more hatred and war nowadays than ever before and it's a very sad truth and worries me how today's children will turn out because of what the media wish to show personally I no longer listen to the news as it upsets me too much.

    All the best
    M x

  • 7 months ago

    by .k.u.s.h.q.u.e.e.n.c.j.

    I absolutely love the truth & positivity reading this.. I wanted to keep reading more.. Lol

    Is there any way I can screenshot this & share this on my facebook ?
    I don't really do that a lot but I have a few people who would enjoy reading this (: if not I totally understand lol

    • 7 months ago

      by Milly Hayward

      Thankyou kushqueencj for asking. By all means share this poem on face book it has an important message and should be shared but please do include me as the writer in case I publish it in a book later. I see so many poems marked anonymous doing the rounds :) All my best wishes Milly x

  • 4 months ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    A rant poem. These poems are a good outlet, aren't they? You express much of what's wrong with the world. From hate fled wars, to put selfish acts. I like how finish by offering the world advice.

    You are right about choosing the right path. I think, ideally this starts with governments. They need to invest in education and young families. If we can our children up in the right way, giving them a healthy moral compass, then they will grow up as responsible adults. Having said this, we need to act now. This poem tries to reach out, urge people to make a difference. I notice a common theme too with this write and your Mother's day one. It's about acting before time runs out. I feel this is especially important to you. You more than most feel the hands of time. It's writing like this that should show us that we can't take time for granted. The time to make a difference is now.

    Thanks Milly. I know we haven't reached out to one another for a while, but u want to say, I'm glad you did. I've missed you x