Comments : Desert Rose

  • 4 months ago

    by .k.u.s.h.q.u.e.e.n.c.j.

    I think this is beautiful .

  • 4 months ago

    by Em (marmite)

    How beautiful

  • 4 months ago

    by Brenda

    This is so swoon worthy....I felt your longing for what was, what is no longer, what you wish is now. This write flows like water, just beautiful.

  • 4 months ago

    by Michael

    SG
    Another incredible piece from you, a true joy to read, with your heart and emotions displayed for a loved one.
    Penned wonderfully my friend
    Michael :)

  • 4 months ago

    by Sinners gospel

    Big thanks to kush queen, Em, Brenda and Michael for giving their time to comment on my poem.

  • 4 months ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    "a heart in exile which cries only for you"
    ^^
    Brilliant line Shane in a beautiful, poignant piece :-) x
    =^.^=

  • 4 months ago

    by Ren

    Just like Brenda said, this is SO swoon worthy! Stunning imagery and such a lovely, beautiful story of love. Wonderful job!

    (<3)^love button has been clicked!

  • 3 months ago

    by Sinners gospel

    Thanks Ren and kitty for such kind words

  • 3 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    Shane, this is again beautifully crafted but such a bittersweet content.

  • 3 months ago

    by Nee

    Shane, I'm in love with your poetry! I think I'll spend more time on your profile :)

    P.S this is Nema, from my old account which I'll keep and leave the other one.

  • 2 months ago

    by naaz

    SG, you have become one of my most favorite poet on this site. I don't know, but after reading your poems I do not stop myself from nominating them for the weekly contest.

    I have saved all your poems. I read this poem many times, but the only thing I didn't get was the title. Why is it desert rose?

    I totally got the emotions of the poem, like, it's about someone you met on some site, some place. You got to know her or fell in love with her but you never got the chance to see her, hear her voice, her laughs, in real.

    First part says, that you never got the chance to hear her voice but you find listen her in every beautiful thing around you. The imaginary in first part of the poem is mostly audio, but it did create a visual imaginary too in eyes of the reader. The early songs of the birds, peace of the noon, a melodious evening you spent in Paris, but my favorite part is the last line that even you are alone in your life you don't feel that way. You never give up because she is keeping you alive. Her voice made you immortal.

    Second part says, that you got to know her for a very small time or you had been in touch with her for a while but she changed you completely. You believe in the smile of the strangers, you feel love and joy inside you, she has given a purpose to your soul, your life. And she is the one who makes you feel complete in this crazy world around you. Imaginary in this part is mostly sensual.

    Third part says, that she is in kind of danger. She, who has brought smile upon your face is in sorrow now. She who has given words and emotions to your poems is in pain now and she is tired of running and hiding because the evilness of politics around her has cut off the wings of your Goddess. Imaginary in this part is sensual, tactile, visual too.

    Last part says, that you are trying to tell her that she is a very brave person, she is perfect and there is no need for her to feel lonely because there are plenty of angels that are looking over her and obviously you are there too, praying for her safety and wellness even though you are miles away from her. The last line of the poem Cleary explains that why you never met her in real because she doesn't want it. But you never stopped loving her. The imaginary in this last part of the poem is just beautiful.

    SG, I request you, never stop writing.

    • 2 months ago

      by Sinners gospel

      Hi naaz, thanks once again for giving your time to read and leaving such good comment. I don't know if I did justice to the title but this poem is not about a person it is about a country, Syria.

      :)

    • 2 months ago

      by naaz

      It's good to see that you still have the image of her in your heart like she used to be.

      Great!