Comments : An Angel's Tale

  • 3 months ago

    by Tony

    I love the imagery here, actually reminds me of your profile picture in a way. It was a pleasure to read.

  • 3 months ago

    by Em (marmite)

    I have no words for this apart from I wish I could nominate for starters

    • 3 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Don't worry about that, Em, just glad you enjoyed it

  • 3 months ago

    by Brenda

    Ben, this is truly lovely. Your visuals are stunning. Well done my friend.

  • 3 months ago

    by Michael

    Ben

    A lovely rhyming piece, that delivers your imagery at its best
    Michael :)

  • 3 months ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    So very whimsical Ben ... a style that you have mastered!

    The title introduces the narrator of the poem, and already I'm expecting wonderful, virtuous, angelic prose. And I'm not disappointed!

    1) Upon a cloud the angel slides down a rainbow to earth ... in just one stanza you create an amazing image of a rainbow being a kind of 'superhighway' for angels to commute between heaven and earth.

    2) The angel plops off the rainbow onto lush green grass and seems surprised to be there, wondering what the 'task' is. This introduces the thought that 'angels' are not aware that they have a job to do ... more like they literally hit the ground running and have to figure out the mission.

    3) This stanza feels like its about the sorry state of the planet (or metaphorically a person). It's dark and the plants are diseased (no more lush green grass), and the angel now understands the task ahead. It suggests that the angel can in some way 'fix' the damage that's been done.

    4) It's personal now ... the angel seems to be telling someone that they've come to send a message - to say that the mistakes are forgiven in heaven ("sky's pure blue") - a place where the pure angels sing.

    As usual, you've woven your magic with mystical, other-worldly language and perfect rhyming. It paints a fairytale image of a simplistic 'your mistakes will be forgiven and you'll get to heaven etc.' theological view.
    A pleasure both to read and comment on Ben :-) x
    =^.^=

    • 3 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Kitty, you have broken this poem down better and understood it more comprehensively than I could!
      Thank you

  • 3 months ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Angels are a heaven scent a gift from above. They can come in many forms. shapes and sizes travelling between heaven and earth. Ben this is a masterpiece. All the best

  • 3 months ago

    by Sinners gospel

    For us that angel is you. We want to listen to your tales forever so please never stop writing. Ben this poem is as beautiful as your last week win.

    • 3 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you, Sg - high praise indeed.

  • 3 months ago

    by CJ Maleney

    Ben!

    I have read many of your works and enjoyed many. I think this has to be one of my favorites.

    It's very light and yet has very very dark undertones

    Fantastic as always

    Regards

    Craig

  • 3 months ago

    by Ren

    Stunning write!

    (<3)^click!

  • 3 months ago

    by Nee

    You make writing seem so easy, Ben, especially with your beautiful rhyme. Each poem I read for you I end up with the same comment "This is such musical, flawless rhyme!" Your poetry is flawless and beautifully flowing.
    I also love most of the stories behind your poetry. You're so talented!

    Never stop writing!

    • 3 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you again, so much. Take care