Comments : The shape of things

  • 6 months ago

    by Nee

    I really love this, Michael! I'm not sure about why there is no punctuation, however, but I gotta say that lack of punctuation was actually the reason why it flows really well somehow.
    I'd like to know whether there is some intentional syllable count to this so that in the end there is a visual shape for the poem, or is it just the way you wanted it to flow/look?

    Wonderful piece!
    Write on

    • 6 months ago

      by Michael

      Thank you Nee
      Because of the story of the poem I just wanted to have shape with it. I first was shaping it as an upside down 'heart' as I felt that my story didn't end with love in the end. If that makes sense.. but I just ended up liking the shape :)
      Thank you for your lovely comments x

  • 6 months ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    Well I like the shape of this thing Michael! Lol. The lack of punctuation here is actually quite clever, as it forced me to read it more carefully. But also .... it speaks volumes in very few words of 'sizing someone up' ... that initial few glances of attraction. Fab write! :-) x
    =^.^=

    • 6 months ago

      by Michael

      Thank you Miss Kitty.
      Yes it does haha :)x

  • 6 months ago

    by Mark

    Wonderful art - are your poems Michael.

    • 6 months ago

      by Michael

      Thanks Mark, lovely words fella :)

    • 6 months ago

      by Michael

      lovely words Mark, thank you :)

  • 6 months ago

    by Brenda

    Oh Michael, such a cool write. Loved the shape and your language in this, Made me sad too it was all for unrequited love. Well done-

    • 6 months ago

      by Michael

      Thank you Miss Brenda
      The shape of things eh! :)x

  • 6 months ago

    by Em (marmite)

    Loved this Michael you've been on a real role with your fantastic poetry recently

    • 6 months ago

      by Michael

      Thank yo Em, lovely words as always :)

  • 6 months ago

    by Ya----Na

    Michael you are so creative and with your poems you always add beauty to our lives.

    • 6 months ago

      by Michael

      Lovely words LG many thanks :)

  • 6 months ago

    by Ren

    (<3)^click!

    • 6 months ago

      by Michael

      Thank you Miss Ren :)x