Comments : The Naked Oaks Will Make Us Pine (English sonnet)

  • 5 months ago

    by Brenda

    Ben, you make Sonnet's appear effortless and I know they are not. My one and only was a struggle and it certainly did not flow as smoothly as yours do. Kudos to you for taking former poetry and presenting it to all of us in such a beautiful manner. Well done my friend -

    • 5 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Brenda, my first few weren't quite so smooth - it just takes practise.

      Thank you

  • 5 months ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    Beautiful Ben!
    The title itself intrigues with the double meaning of the use of 'pine' ... both with reference to the tree (oak) and to pine for someone. Very clever.

    1st quatrain: If a relationship is full of rows and it feels easier to be alone, when feeling the love is like trying to decipher hieroglyphics - then it's all but lost and too late to save. This feels sad and resigned to the end of a love.

    2nd: The rows become louder and the 'bombs' dropped (hurtful words) explode even louder and cause irreparable damage, leaving nothing but regret. Great use of analogy here to express the damage that words cause - these are the things that can't be taken back or forgotten.

    3rd: Here is a wise reminder that while all is good with the relationship during it's 'summer' season ... don't take that for granted, because love will only grow into an old oak if nurtured ... if neglected - it'll shed it's leaves and become a pine tree ... temporary - like a Christmas tree - used only for a brief period. Also, referring back to the title here, once the great love is lost (the naked oak) - it will pined for and missed. Once that happens - we have to carry on alone. I found this to be really insightful with the oak a fantastic metaphor for a strong and lasting love, and the pine tree for a short love.

    Couplet: This feels like a warning not to just dream of a good love, but to nurture it while awake and in reality. If not, you'll wake up and the joy of love will be spent and gone.

    Another storming sonnet Ben - I really enjoyed it! :-) x
    =^.^=

    • 5 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Brilliant comment, Kitty - I think you understand this better than me!

  • 5 months ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello Ben,

    Your sonnets are wonderful - little gems that need framing. Is this a re-post?

    All the best, Michael

    • 5 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks, Michael, and yes it is. I think I wrote it a year ago or so.

  • 5 months ago

    by Jamie

    I will be the first person to admit I really don't like sonnets but this one is really well written and the title is the thing that drew me in. it is brilliant.

    • 5 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks so much, Jamie, for your honesty and praise.
      Take care