Mother... Why? (Rondeau)

by Tony   Apr 9, 2018


Mother why do you hurt me so?
Pain is all you have ever shown.
Bruises and scars, adorn my face-
The hurt I've found in your embrace.
Abuse from you is all I know.

It's true you reap that which you sow-
Alone, in silence filled with woe
In sadness you sit in disgrace
Mother why?

Solitude is colder than snow,
Frigid like my heart's Rondeau.
Distance has become commonplace
Till you no longer had a space
In my life when... I let you go
Mother why?

*Special thanks to Hellon for challenging me with form, and to both her and Mr. Darcy with their insights and editing.

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  • 1 year ago

    by Em (marmite)

    Judging Comment - Mother... Why? (Rondeau) by Tony points 4 - All I can say about this is that it really hit him to me how some of us don't get along with our parents and though there will be different reasons why it no doubt hurts all the same and this was relatable and extremely beautifully done even if extremely saddening

  • 1 year ago

    by Em (marmite)

    This hit a real core with me

  • 1 year ago

    by Hellon

    Tony...I'm so glad you stuck with the form and produced such a wonderful Rondeau in the end. It is a very sad subject obviously and your emotions could have made you just chuck the towel in but you didn't and that says a lot in my book. Well done...

    • 1 year ago

      by Tony

      Thank you for the challenge, and the editing.

  • 1 year ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Great job here, Tony.

    A hard hitting poem, beautifully written.

    • 1 year ago

      by Tony

      Thanks for the help editing.

  • 1 year ago

    by Brenda

    Tony, this is amazing! Glad to see it's nominated. Well done -

    • 1 year ago

      by Tony

      Thank you for the kind words Brenda.

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