love this Darren. nominated.

Darren this is immense the only thing I'd change is remove the 'as' at the beginning of the end stanza but only because that line would then be on one line not two and I have bad ocd and am being really picky I know (lol) but this doesn't take away the fact that this is really moving and somewhat relatable to many of us here as I bet not one of us can honestly say we haven't felt good enough at some point and if we can say it honestly then at some point before we die we certainly will.
Take care
Em x

Darren, this feels like someone full of self loathing due to an illness (?could be depression or something physical?) that makes him feel less worthy of his marriage because he's not as able and strong as he feels he should be. You refer to wedding vows ... "in sickness and in health" has to apply to both parties. A really well written, sad and thought provoking write :-) x
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Rhyme? RHYME? Good heavens, man, I refuse to comment any further on principle alone...

Great write - glad to see it nominated.

Ben

Darren,

this is a tad melancholy. Not like you at all!

Regurgitated poetry - you can't beat it!

re-edited again, lost partial rhyme, reduced syllable count.
apologies to those who liked. I will stop toying with it now.