summer rain (rondeau)

by - Mr. Darcy   Apr 10, 2018


within the rain, I heard your name
inhaled your earth scent, as it came
I am bereft without you near
my heart is full, of aching tears
. . .I'll drown, in this, relentless pain

I'm wandering this world insane
retracing you, inside my brain
where are you. . . is that you near
. . .within the rain

on bended knee, to you I came
'oh shower me a sweet refrain'
if I can never hold you here,
perhaps, I'll ever keep you near,
savouring my summer's pain
. . .within the rain

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Mr. Darcy
© 2018

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A Rondeau is a French form, 15 lines long, consisting of three stanzas: a quintet, a quatrain, and a sestet with a rhyme scheme as follows: aabba aabR aabbaR. Lines 9 and 15 are short - a refrain (R) consisting of a phrase taken from line one. The other lines are longer (but all of the same metrical length).

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  • 6 days ago

    by Mark

    Great win!

  • 1 week ago

    by Sinners gospel

    Congrats!

  • 1 week ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Fully deserved, good fellow - well done.

  • 1 week ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Love this, Michael. All I would say is that in line 8 you seem to lose a syllable. However, the ellipsis makes up for it with pause, to a certain extent.

    Take care,

    Ben

    • 1 week ago

      by - Mr. Darcy

      thanks, Ben. I did think of placing an 'oh, where are you...' but I rather like the idea of being lost for words.

  • 1 week ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    Sad and swoony Michael ... packaged in a beautiful Rondeau :-) The punctuation OCD side of me wants to see a question mark after your question though ... :-) x
    =^.^=

    • 1 week ago

      by - Mr. Darcy

      To be honest, I did not want to clutter the poem with punctuation marks - I think question marks are the most untidy of the lot! lol

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