Comments : summer rain (rondeau)

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Michael

    Mr D :)

    At the same time I posted - spooky, anyway I loved this on the thread and my mind has not changed. Brilliant, now I understand a little more (I think) :)

    Michael

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Brenda

    Michael, another amazing Rondeau! I love the love theme here-just beautiful!

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Hellon

    This was just lovely Michael. I'd like to thank you for all the help you give in the thread. I think everyone enjoyed themselves.

  • 2 weeks ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    No, we should thank you Hellon for showing this site how to be a community of writers, all sharing and learning together.

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    Sad and swoony Michael ... packaged in a beautiful Rondeau :-) The punctuation OCD side of me wants to see a question mark after your question though ... :-) x
    =^.^=

    • 2 weeks ago

      by - Mr. Darcy

      To be honest, I did not want to clutter the poem with punctuation marks - I think question marks are the most untidy of the lot! lol

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Love this, Michael. All I would say is that in line 8 you seem to lose a syllable. However, the ellipsis makes up for it with pause, to a certain extent.

    Take care,

    Ben

    • 2 weeks ago

      by - Mr. Darcy

      thanks, Ben. I did think of placing an 'oh, where are you...' but I rather like the idea of being lost for words.

  • 1 week ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Fully deserved, good fellow - well done.

  • 1 week ago

    by Sinners gospel

    Congrats!

  • 1 week ago

    by Mark

    Great win!