Heart's Carbuncle (etheree)

by Ben Pickard   Apr 14, 2018


strange
that you
never saw
the carbuncle
that eclipsed my heart,
suffocating the sound
of the rhythmic beats that struck
a cacophony of noise 'til
the thud was smothered by this disease;
I am love's poor fool - a castle's ruin.

--

Ben Pickard 2018

*The poetry form, Etheree, consists of 10 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10 syllables.

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  • 3 months ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    You've done yourself proud, Ben. I'm glad this is already nominated. Good luck.

  • 3 months ago

    by Hellon

    Ben..as always you have come up with the goods and they are perfect so I can't fault anything in this verse but....were's you palidrome man...I know it's in there somewhere....

    • 3 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks so much, Hellon, but that palidrome has me all...well...confuddled!

  • 3 months ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    Oh carbuncle! Don't ask why but I love this word (I wouldn't actually want one though!) The context you've used it in, and the flawless form too make this a fab poem Ben! :-) x
    =^.^=

  • 3 months ago

    by Brenda

    Ben, as always you pull a formed piece with your usual flair to perfection-well done my friend-

  • 3 months ago

    by Michael

    Well done on this Ben
    M :)

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