Comments : My Tears Are Not Enough

  • 3 months ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    Oh Ben stop it! I was all happy from our win and now I want to cry! The way you use language and poetry to emote never fails to move me. This is a terrifying thought and not something I think a parent could survive. Love/hate it in equal measures :-) x
    =^.^=

    • 3 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Sorry, Kitty. But thanks for the comment.

    • 3 months ago

      by Tony

      It's not something a parent survives... It just doesn't kill you all at once.

  • 3 months ago

    by Mark

    What a sad poem. So very well written.

    • 3 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Tony - you are right and thank you, Mark.

  • 3 months ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Benny - I am sorry to see such a sad piece.. I was conflicted in clicking the like as the poetry itself is so amazing - but the content is so saddening..

    much love xx

    • 3 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Naomi, so good to hear from you. I hope you are well.

    • 3 months ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      i posted in the club discussion board..

  • 3 months ago

    by Em (marmite)

    The first time I read this I was moved and now upon reading again I am moved I'm glad you reposted (I'm certain) we all I presume but wouldn't know that we question our parenting whether or not we're doing the right thing probably numerous times a day and you know the answer Ben, the answer is yes as we can only do our best.
    Take care
    Em x

  • 3 months ago

    by Euphanasia

    Wow at a lose for words

    Very artistic imagery.
    Brilliant mind you have to convey such poetry Ben.
    - 1 luv

  • 3 months ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Congratulations :p

  • 3 months ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Congratulations on a very well deserved win. Milly x

  • 3 months ago

    by Mark

    Well deserved win, congrats

  • 3 months ago

    by Pinkie Pot Cheeks

    This piece went straight to my heart!! Thank you Ben for posting this for us!! And Congrats!!

  • 1 month ago

    by Tony

    Judge's Comment

    In iambic tetrameter, surprise surprise, Ben (Pickard to alleviate confusion) illustrates a beautiful shoreline with a mountainous backdrop. Right from the start I was hit with unease at the idea of crunching seashells underfoot, and knew something must have happened at this beach. The personification of the ripples freezing someone in place while they are assaulted by ghosts of their past was a particularly devious imagery. Then to add to that... the mountains are pressing in and the clouds are heavy, with sadness yes, but also with guilt as the reader later finds out. I was quite literally moved to tears at the last stanza, with the image of a child lost and a heartbroken father. This poem is well, and technically, written; rhymed beautifully throughout, and tells a heartgripping story.