Ben, not many times that you have left your rhyming behind, but it's a great write in the true style of poetry. You know that I am a dyed in the wool rhymer, don't think I could write my poems any other way.
Ben this is just excellent well more than excellent but I am lost for words in all honesty I have read this (in hiding) a few times and each time I've found more thrilling about it that just blows me away which doesn't surprise me anymore with you Sir. I was going to break this up piece by piece but it is just too wonderful to do that. The whole piece seeps fantastic yet vivid imagery which I am again not surprised at.
Glad to see its nominated by the way :)
Another epic piece. I loved the weave of historic reference but more the fact that you can weave such fabulous metaphors throughout this piece and conjure up such vivid imagery despite the fact it is free verse lol. Loved it. Milly x
You really should write more free verse! This is beautiful! I love this so much! I love the reference to Captain Cook, to Cupid, and others. I love the title, the wording... This is well-crafted! I love the punctuations. I can sense a love at first sight scenario or something of that sort, and from that you dance with words and created something everlasting from a short span of time when the eyes of the two of you met each other. You play so wonderfully with your words, but the awkwardness is really evident, I love that kind of creativity! Great job! Added to favorites!
Thanks so much, Mahal. To be honest, I do write a fair bit of free verse but it just isn't noticed as much, I suppose. Rhyming poetry comes more easily to me generally speaking but I enjoy writing (or attempting) poetry in all its many forms.
6 months ago
I'm finding my inability to nominate a little frustrating now :/
I have to say I do love it when you write free verse, your language and phrasing is always very addictive and at times find myself wanting more free verse from you :)
I think alot of people will read this and nod in affirmation at this write and as usual you present it in a fabulous way.