Comments : Paper Tomb

  • 6 months ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    one word - 'syllables'

    • 6 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      12/10/12/10/12/10....I tell you, they haunt me.

  • 6 months ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Dear Ben, amazing write. All the best to you

  • 6 months ago

    by Mahal Ko Kuya Ko

    Wow! This is worded amazingly! I love everything especially the final stanza!

    --- MKKK

  • 6 months ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    Ouch Ben! Lots of dark and sharp pointy bits that express your message clearly. I just love how you bleed your words. Brilliant! :-) x
    =^.^=

  • 6 months ago

    by Em (marmite)

    Absolutely gutted Ben as I've read and read and read this piece and wrote a full in depth comment last night as I couldn't sleep then came to post it and low and behold I pasted over instead of copying silly, silly Em lol just know I appreciate and understand this piece completely

    • 6 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Don't worry Em - your time just reading is enough

  • 6 months ago

    by Michael

    Your dark and poetic words - shine through Ben
    Very well written
    Michael :)

    • 6 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks, Michael and well done on your win this week.

  • 6 months ago

    by CJ Maleney

    Done as only you can Ben.

    I don't think your words will ever dry up or your quill run dry. I for one certainly hope that this is never the case.

    Have a good one dude

    Craig

  • 6 months ago

    by Ben

    A pointy stabby write that's ensconced in marshmallows and clouds. ..your control of phrasing is masterful. Wonderful write as always my good man.

    Saved this one to favs for later eating

    All the best

    Ben

  • 6 months ago

    by CRAFTY KEN

    Well done again, Mr. Ben! Your temporary pull away from rhyme, stretched the rubber to it's end, then snapped back again. Until that time, I'll write with blood from open wounds,
    And sharpen up my quill on bones exposed;
    The parchments that are left can decorate my tomb,
    Despite my verse becoming broken prose. Those words go deep!
    Great work!

    • 6 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you, Ken - I always love your comments!

  • 6 months ago

    by Bless_Poet

    wow what a deep and awakening poem. i love you expressed every writer's fear in stanza 3, yet showed your passion in stanza 1. this poem to me relates the painful passion and love for writing. the necessity to let emotion out. thank you Mr Pickard INSPIRATIONAL

    • 6 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you so much and welcome to the site.

  • 6 months ago

    by Mark

    Emotional write, great win!

  • 6 months ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Congratulations, Ben. :)

  • 6 months ago

    by Glenn Gay

    Very well written Been. Good job!

  • 3 months ago

    by gumshuda

    Judging comment:

    The author has beautifully blended a great mixture of tones and textures in this piece. The flow is wonderfully smooth. Along with the flow of the poem, the rhyming is well done, not at all feeling forced or exerted upon.
    While I am unsure if this poem is about certain kinds of unsettling feelings the poet feels or wishes to portray, or is it about some kind of dissatisfaction or incompleteness in one's own writing, I personally feel that whatever it might be, whatever might be reasons for making the poet pen this, this poem is nothing less than beautiful. Well done and congratulations.