Hypnotised by your image.

by Blank   Jun 9, 2018


By the way you walk.
And the way you talk.

I'm running out of time,
Please, will you be mine?

The smile you wear,
My heart can't bare.

The time I wasted,
And the dreams I created.

This photo swings left to right.
I'll be thinking of you tonight.

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  • 5 years ago

    by Michael

    Fenrir,
    Photos hold so many emotions, I enjoyed reading your little and nice rhymed piece
    Well done
    Michael :)

    • 5 years ago

      by Blank

      Thank you Michael.
      Photos are frozen stories and emotions, beautiful moments.

  • 5 years ago

    by CânnâBîsh

    This is sweet and adorable. I like it, very much.

  • 5 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Just a thought, would this sound any good?

    By the way you walk.
    And the way you talk.

    I'm running out of time,
    Please, be mine?

    The smile you wear,
    My heart can't bare.

    The time I wasted,
    the dreams created.

    Your photo swings,
    left and right.

    I'll be thinking of you
    tonight. . .

    Please be mine?

    • 5 years ago

      by Blank

      It's very nice, and the feedback is appreciated.
      But I think I prefer my version, thank you though.

  • 5 years ago

    by Em (marmite)

    This is very interesting and as if you haven't exactly met or seen this person but you've been intrigued by them so make your own image.... Very creative I would possibly take the "and" out of stanza 4 though just to improve flow a little

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