Quicksand

by jeanette   Aug 1, 2018


Baby,baby,baby
Where do we begin?, it seems our lives are in turmoil. Its like we're in quicksand & sinking deeper & deeper.....
Can we climb out of this,is our love strong
enough to pull through this quicksand pit we're sinking into?
Baby,baby,baby
Its getting dark all around us now,I can't see a single star. I feel your grip around me loosen more & more. Can we make it out of this, is our love strong enough to pull through this qiicksand pit, we're sinking into.
Baby,baby,baby
Lets pull through.....

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  • 5 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    I like the simile of loosing a relationship to feeling like quicksand. Sinking deeper, the harder you try to not sink, the deeper you go. I like the refrain too ' baby, baby, baby' by repeating this it conveyed the emotion this poem required.
    Finally, you leave the reader with hope...

    There are a few edits needed here and there, but all in all a good write.

    Take care.

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