Comments : Too Much To Read? Good

  • 2 months ago

    by Michael

    A powerful message Ben, I like the way you have has used words in an alternative tone or way, but also raw material with a sharpened edge!

    Michael :)

  • 2 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Thank you, Michael

  • 2 months ago

    by Brenda

    A strong write Ben. In your face type that takes no prisoners. Well done-

  • 2 months ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Wow Ben the tongue has spoken. Love it. Glad to see it nominated. All the very best

  • 2 months ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Never too much for me. Sometimes the word has to be spread. Glad this is nominated.
    Superb!

    • 2 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks, Michael. I was worried that the use of different forms (the acrostic and senryu) might be insensitive and detract from the serious subject, but I think it's okay the way it is.

  • 2 months ago

    by CRAFTY KEN

    Hey Ben, I like how you brought to light how many women suffer every day at the hands of heatless men, husbands, boyfriends, slave trade, rapists. Much punishment they rightly deserve. I know this will never happen in this unjust world. I believe what scripture says; Some men's sins our obvious, others follow after! This is when they die and are Judged from the Book of their deeds. Great write! Added to my Favorites.

    • 2 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Well said, Ken. Thanks for reading.

  • 2 months ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Superbly written. Glad it was nominated. It is a Global issue that women still suffer physical and psychological abuse with the perpetrators never being prosecuted or punished. That final stanza "We cannot ever punish the perpetrators with our eyes wide shut" sums it up exactly. Too many people still turn a blind eye. Well done. Anything that raises awareness helps. Milly x

    • 2 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you, Milly and you are right.

  • 2 months ago

    by Ya----Na

    One of the best way to raise awareness towards such issues by one of the best poet of our time.

    • 2 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      I agree with at least half of your comment, S; thank you.

  • 2 months ago

    by Dream Astronaut

    "..she is now another of his
    Ornaments, broken, humiliated and
    Destined to be just another statistic"

    This is a real depiction of every abuse aftermaths.
    Healing is one but getting over the mental and emotional damage is another thing.

    • 2 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you for taking the time to read.

  • 2 months ago

    by Joseph Kerr

    "We cannot ever
    punish the perpetrators
    with our eyes wide shut"
    Poignant reflection of society's tendency to turn a blind eye, not interfere or even ask "Is everything OK?"

  • 2 months ago

    by CJ Maleney

    I'm not sure where this came from dude, perhaps with working away I've missed something in the news.

    Anyway its a bloody powerful bit of work

    Craig

    • 2 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Nothing specific on the news that I'm aware of, Craig, although it's not like you never hear stories like this.
      Take care

  • 2 months ago

    by Maple Tree

    this is damn good....

  • 2 months ago

    by Em (marmite)

    Ben you're right I know.... It got me, it got me good!!! Damn man pass me the tissues X

  • 2 months ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I don't have words to describe what you already did, so emotionally and with that raw, unflinching truth. How true that we have to open our eyes... especially when it can become routine for us to shrink back if we see signs of abuse or by saying "it's none of our business" or "they're a good family/couple". I feel like sometimes we as a society can harbor this bias if we personally know the person who is doing the abuse, and in a way we excuse or pardon them because our thoughts are "I don't think they could ever be capable of something like that".

    This made me think of way too many things. I also hear a lot of people saying to "just leave", as if it's ever that simple in a situation like this, with any kind of abusive relationship. I actually get kind of angry when the common reaction is to put ALL the burden on the victims to speak up, when often their hands are tied and it's not always safe. What's even scarier is how a person can think they deserve this, because there are so many mind games that come along with any kind of abuse... and it's never as simple as the surface.

    Hard to read piece but necessary.

  • 2 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    You have so poetically expressed these sentiments Ben...great imagery...awesome work...congrats on the win!

  • 2 months ago

    by Mark

    Congrats! Lovely win!

  • 1 month ago

    by Jamie

    As an abuse survivor I know every word that was spoken here. I feel the pain of this poem and what this person is going through in theory at least. This poem may make a lot of people squamish but you have done well to your use your voice to speak out about a topic that many people are mum about and in a lot of ways you could say this is a taboo subject because of quiet people get. As maryanne stated I don't think there needs to be any words to describe what you have said.

    I think to a lot of people the visuals/imagery could be too much, but reality this is truly what happens with abuse, especially when it is women vs man. Especially a big man like a hulk so to speak. So I applaud the visuals in the sense that you did not hold anything back. Because I do believe people who have not been abused need to know what happens. It is not a pretty sight.

    One last thing, I truly love the ending because I as stated above loved that you called people out for seeing it happen but not stopping it from happening. We are blinded by our own fear it seems. And I truly think this is the world nowadays. Anyway. This poem truly does deserve all the praise it has gotten for its honesty and courage to speak it.