Comments : When We Met

  • 6 months ago

    by P o e m e l o

    So so so lovely :) Love this

    • 6 months ago

      by Walter

      Appreciate your comments, thanks Poemelo :)

  • 6 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    Awww, sweeettt.

    • 6 months ago

      by Walter

      Thanks again Mel

  • 6 months ago

    by Milly Hayward

    This made me smile as soon as I started reading it. Love the rhyming and the romantic imagery. That first moment when you see someone who you know you are going to fall in love with is priceless. Loved this piece. Milly x

    • 6 months ago

      by Walter

      Thanks so much Milly. Your lovely comments made me smile too x

  • 5 months ago

    by Darren

    This is great Walter, love how compact it is, which helps with the flow.
    However...
    You could compact it slightly more, just to remove those little stumbling words that alter the flow.

    Stanza 2
    final line, could read 'You're perfect'
    Stanza 3
    Line one, could read simply 'cannot believe'
    Stanza 6
    Line 3 , discard the word 'both' you have already suggested the poem involves you both.

    Just a couple of suggestions, do with them what you may, it's your poem after all.

    thanks for sharing

  • 3 months ago

    by Lyical Madness

    Really beautiful :)

    • 3 months ago

      by Walter

      Thank you LM :)