Comments : Mothers and daughters (acrostic)

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Ben Pickard

    What a genuinely beautiful acrostic, Brenda.

    • 2 weeks ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you so much Ben. I appreciate you!

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Blank Canvas

    This is something I will never truly understand, but I do agree with Ben, that this is a well written acrostic for a couple of reasons:

    The structure itself is well documented because I believe the poem itself technically has to be about the title, and you did well to convay the feelings of a mother and daughter relationship. It is well laid out and to me there are no real choppy parts while reading through this.

    The other reason I love this so much is because of the emotion you give throughout. I love the subtle metaphors you paint with words. You really do take the reader through a trip through time and you convay that love so well. I have often heard from my wife how crazy teen girls can be and how frustrating they can be as well, I love how you used the words magical trip. It really does fit well, from what I have heard it really is true.

    You have described your daughters to be a light in your life and it seems like from just from reading the poem you are a proud mother. And I loved the ending as well because you end it by saying you are intertwined which I assume is the biggest compliment you can give.

    Sorry I am rambling but this is excellent.

    • 2 weeks ago

      by Brenda

      Jamie, thank you so much! I truly appreciate your wonderful comments. Mothers and daughters can have such crazy relationships. I'm proud of my 2 and love them to pieces.

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Oh Brenda the love and relationship with your daughters are so well described. Our little girls all grown and mother's themselves. Add to my favorite. You put a smile on my face while reading. Hugs to you

    • 2 weeks ago

      by Brenda

      Awww thank you Dagmar! It truly is amazing these babies are now all grown up. Hugs you-

  • 2 weeks ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Wow, Brenda, a long acrostic full of sentimental love.
    Did you find this easy to write? I often find this form reaches into the subconscious and the inspiration/ truth flows through the hand to the page.
    Good job x

    • 2 weeks ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you Michael! It was easy and difficult at the same time if that makes sense. Once it started rolling, it just flowed.

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Ya----Na

    Uniquely individual and I am too excited for what the future brings...
    Brenda it is so good to see you back and writing such beautiful/heartfelt /heart wrenching poems once again. In other words capturing the exact emotions. You chose the best and purest relationship and wrote such a beautiful poem which is casting a spell over our hearts

    • 2 weeks ago

      by Brenda

      Shane, thank you so much my friend-you are too kind-hugs to you!

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Maple Tree

    <3

    • 2 weeks ago

      by Brenda

      Hugs and love to you my friend-

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Em (marmite)

    How did I miss this? Absolutely loved it B :)

    • 2 weeks ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you Miss Em! I think you've been a bit preoccupied, er, hmm lol...