Comments : Putting it bluntly

  • 4 months ago

    by Jamie

    I really enjoyed the honesty in this piece em. I think the reader can leave it up to their imagination as to which site you are referring to, but

    It seems like that one day you logged onto it, you got sick and tired of wading through the shit that comes along with it and you wanted to log off (possibly for good) or that the way I read it. I like the anxiety and almost anger and sadness you put into this, at least at the beginning. Most people would call it fate, perhaps it was a gut feeling that you needed to stay on a little bit longer, and that day you didn't expect to find a person or perhaps the person you were looking for.

    Of course being that you have always had bad messages made you hesitate to open that message from a stranger, but perhaps you noticed something different or positive and that made you read it. But that day was a chance encounter and this was the day you fell in love.

    I love the emotional tones this holds, because you take the reader on a journey through your mind.

    "Giving you chance to login"

    There should be an "a" between you and chance.

    But otherwise well written.

  • 4 months ago

    by Brenda

    I'm glad you read that post because it has brought you to where you are now. In love and happy. Hugs my dear-

  • 4 months ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    Chat sites normally are a toxic place for women. It's full of perverts, not interested in actual conversation. However, there is usually one or two floating around who are actually a decent human being. You stuck around that extra five minutes and it was worth it. You found love when the odds weren't exactly in your favor. Sometimes that's the best way, unexpectedly.

  • 4 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    I'd gotten bored of
    "show us your tits"
    ^^

    So that's what I've been doing wrong! Why in God's name didn't you tell me earlier, Em?
    Seriously, though, it just goes to show that there is often an exception to the rule - sounds like you found it.

    Take care

  • 4 months ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    show us your tits"
    ^
    This was a cutting, yet effective way to cast a readers mind into the seedy world of on-line dating. The fact that you mentioned you became bored with it also shows that enough time had past for you to realise that there are a lot of guys who just don't care. They may pretend to, but all they want is to use you.
    I can imagine you skipping past guys profiles quickly, but then you came across one that was different. More sincere, perhaps? It was this man above the rest that made you stay for "an extra 5 minutes"
    He did the right thing of course, but had he not does not bear thinking about. But I will because in this poem you've cleverly left this part for the reader to fill in the gaps.
    What was it that caught your eye. Was it love at first sight? Yes, it must have been that powerful. It was like cupid had released an arrow which captured both of you. From this moment on you both knew, though your fears would have kept this away from you initially.

    Being grateful for love and its story is something we can all relate to. Some of the world's best literature is based on a love story. Em, this is your love story and it is every bit as captivating.
    All the very best. X