Comments : The Science Of Violence

  • 3 months ago

    by Daniel

    You force a lot of rhyme here, and it’s kind of unfortunate because I like the idea, and the energy behind it. I mean, I’m not anti-rhyme, but the restructuring of sentence formation is distracting if it’s done a lot? Maybe it’s a style thing I need to get used to lol. The message is a positive one, and something we can all adhere to. I like a lot about this poem, despite my comments. Maybe I need to hear it spoken to appreciate it more.

    • 3 months ago

      by CJ Maleney

      I totally understand where you are coming from.

      It was one of those that was written in the early hours when I couldn't sleep. I had it in my head and just spilled it out. As is often the case with what I write. Things flow or they don't! This just kept going.

      I'll admit it kinda flashes in and out and is not an easy read, but it was an easy write. Also yes! When I read a poem out loud it's completely different to the way it reads.

      I've only done this once and it was in front of 50 people. Was I nervous? Dam right I was!.

      Thanks for the feed back it's appreciated.

  • 3 months ago

    by Brenda

    Craig, fascinating write. A lot to ponder there and oh so true! People will never understand that the things they do will always have some sort of consequence. Well said Sir!

    • 3 months ago

      by CJ Maleney

      Thanks Bren.

      What goes around comes around And all that x

  • 3 months ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Oh wow. So glad to see this nominated. All the very best

    • 3 months ago

      by CJ Maleney

      Thank you.

      Hope you have a fantastic Christmas and new years x

  • 1 month ago

    by Cam M

    Quite amusing, and rather insightful. I find your poetry quite satisfying to read. Thank you.

    • 1 month ago

      by CJ Maleney

      Thank you. Chuffed you liked it

      Craig