Comments : Him (not so much a poem but still from my heart, head, and hand)

  • 5 years ago

    by Lost One

    Change "him" to "her" and it feels as if you've plucked the unwritten words from my own mind. You are very articulate, descriptive, and command a use of subtle personification that brings the man's mere aura to life. Well written.

    *I thing autocorrect may have changed "whirlwind" to "world wind."

    ; )

    • 5 years ago

      by Victoria Ramey

      Auto correct can be so demanding to its stubborn standards. Thank you for correcting it.lol. also thank you for the comment. I strive to bring an emotional vividness...especially to the misunderstood characters.

  • 5 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I LOVE your voice in this. It's clear and emotional and touching, that promise he will not be alone. To truly have someone "see" us for who we are, in all aspects, despite despair and darkness, is a powerful thing.

    • 5 years ago

      by Victoria Ramey

      Thank you so much for such an insightful comment. I try, very hard, to write emotional vividness and im glad it spoke to you in some way.

      Thank you