Comments : A Mouth Full Of Feathers (Etheree)

  • 1 week ago

    by DarkNDangerous

    I love short poems that convey so much emotion. This gave me chills. Definitely have felt this way before, but never thought it could be so eloquently written. Amazing poem Ben!

    • 1 week ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks for reading and for the encouragement.

  • 1 week ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    swans are beautiful, elegant birds. Their grace can be likened to that of many a similar thing. I absolutely love the way you lead the reader to swoon and then swipe away the light imagery with an image so murderously graphic. Superb.

  • 1 week ago

    by Em (marmite)

    Ben your wording here is sublime... I can hear the snapping of the neck just as your feelings snap.. Wow

  • 1 week ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Ahh, I'm sure I'm not the only one who received shivers reading this. I agree about the gentle tone you set, the gracefulness you convey, then the harsh imagery. The sudden image (and imagined sound) of the swan's neck snapping, and the sadness I felt with that last line just sticks with the reader.
    Something so delicate, so intimate, now lost or tainted. Now no longer bestowing such a presence, a gift.

    • 1 week ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Your comments are always so perceptive, MA. Thank you.

  • 1 week ago

    by C Cattaway

    Beautiful x

  • 1 week ago

    by CRAFTY KEN

    Hey Ben, Etheree is way too much for me! Just when I thought you had maxed out in your types of poems, you throw a strikeout curve ball. All the beautiful lines of the swan overshadow the Etheree style, but, together, bring a beautiful masterpiece, well done.
    Added to my Favorites!

    • 1 week ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks so much, Ken. You should give the form a try, it's a lot of fun and not too difficult.

  • 1 week ago

    by Maple Tree

    This is so beautiful and powerful <3