Comments : Dreams

  • 18 years ago

    by Emilia

    very good =) I voted a 5!!! keep it up!

  • 18 years ago

    by Dorotea©

    If I follow my dreams to the end,
    A bad life I could mend.

    In the other parts the flow was good, but work on this part some more. You see the second line is so much shorter than in the other parts so it messes the flow up. Otherwise very good poem, keep writing.
    Satuxxa

  • 18 years ago

    by Nee

    good poem!!!
    well written and well expressed!!
    keep it up the good work
    take care
    Nema
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  • 18 years ago

    by NannO

    Gud job.. it didnt reli capture me the way ur other poems did, but gud effort.. one line didnt match the flow coz it was too short, maybe u shud work a lil on that one.. nice rhyme, but ur words wer kinda used up and common.. o well, maybe its one of those low days 4 me..
    take care
    Nannoush

  • 17 years ago

    by Ariana

    I understand the POV you're writing from, well I think I do anyway LOL. That feeling of just being able to get away from reality by dreaming is presented in this poem. The rhyming was good except for the couplet in the last stanza which slightly disrupts the flow but otherwise the rhythm works well here. I think the imagery in this is very picturesque and pretty, almost surreal which works well because of course that's what dreams are like. Nice poem :)