Comments : Dark Everlasting

  • 19 years ago

    by Aken Sol

    Okay, whoa.... at first i thought it was the lost of inspiration right but somehow, SOMEHOW, i figured it could be something else. like a relationship you have with someone else?
    So wise beyond our years ;-)
    Aken Sol

  • 19 years ago

    by Kevin J

    Deep write sean. It reminds me of coming home at the end of a bad day, one you want to forget about, but your brain won't let go. You go over all the should of's and could of's *regets* The only relief you get is sleep *darkness*...that's just my take on this write. Excellent write dude;)

  • 19 years ago

    by joe

    Bravo!....great work the world needs people who can write like you, thank you for sharing

  • 19 years ago

    by Lance Hardy

    I thought of the same thing Kevin J did when I read it. I can relate to it and dwell on it.

  • 19 years ago

    by Tessa

    I like it, you rythme very well, the only problem that I see is that the fluency is occasionally lost. But other than that it's wonderful ^_^

  • 18 years ago

    by shawn hoskins

    Man that was deep i read it a couple of times very thought provoking

  • 18 years ago

    by midnight♥lullibys

    Very good...i really like yout style of writeing....sorry i really dontk now what else to say so ....very good...5/5 ha

  • 17 years ago

    by Lovely Bones

    "So the words, they stick,
    they're stuck, I'm out of luck,
    they won't flow."

    That is exactly what I am feeling right now, and it's ironic, because I couldn't put it into words... You did! It's great to be able to read someone elses poetry and know that you can relate.

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    Last stanza, third line. You could write 'alright' instead of having it broken into 'all' & 'right'.

    Awesome poem, the rhymes in this one were pleasant to read. I liked waiting and wondering, when will it come next! Although it seemed like it was all over the place, I liked that idea. It made this poem interesting. I liked :)

  • 17 years ago

    by Megann Lee

    I don't know if this poem was supposed to but it sent shivers up my spin. And gave me goose bumps. I don't know why, but it did, and this poem was amazing. I enjoyed it quiet abit.

  • 17 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    I'm running out of poems to read! This poem seems to be different than your other ones, the structure. Good job

  • 17 years ago

    by UnToLd TrUtH

    Wow this is really good.