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So I hadn't read your comment when I wrote that.. O well.. good poem anyway

That's genius.. the weight of your words is amazing.. i loved

this gutless parry’s
weight I carry
for my troubles have not perished
like a virus passed to folks I know
they show themselves in those I cherish

perfectly poetic..

This is a response to the comment that I made beforehand. I do like this poem and gave it 5/5. I particularly liked the last stanza if you wish to have some consrtuctive criticisms it would be to try and get the sounding a little bit better some of the lines are longer than others. I choose to comment to complement people's work and not to criticise but it is still a good poem. Keep writing. Love Emma xxx

I think that much of the difficulty you are getting with people voting or commenting on this poem is that it is grossly misunderstood by the mass populace. Anyway I really like it, it definately has some good points to prove. When it comes to the answer- I cant help you. I think I am struglling with that myself. The writing is good, the vocab is great too, most people wont understand the concept of the poem strictly because of the vocabulary, which doesnt matter. I like the ambigouity in this piece, and I like how the last stanza rhymes when the rest does not, it ties in nicely.

Great poem!