Cuts

Such a deep poem, so musch emotion is shown in so little words. I love this poem so much, expecially the way you express your feelings!

This was a different poem that totally was awsome. I loved it it was super sad but you wrote it beautifully....great job 5/5
Scooby

I like this poem. It's different from alot of others, in the structure and sets it apart from traditional depression poems. (Not that there's a norm to follow, but you know.)
However, I do have one suggestion so that It flows a little better.
Some of your responding lines to each word fluctuate in length, but with minor alterations it can be fixed. E.G
First line:
'Bleeding,
Puddles all over the floor.'
Third to last line:
'Tears;
Consumed in the Devil's kiss.'
Just a suggestion, to make it a little easier to follow.
Great poem though, loved it.
Let me know what you decide to do, I won't be offended either way and I'm sorry if you take this offensively too :)
Take care.
-Laura.

wow thats a real i opener i dont tell my friends about my minor depression and well yeh thax so much 4 d criciscium i really appreciate bcuz no eva gives me advise u chose 1 of my worse peices tho
best wishes always
luv rach

Class 'n' deep poem? Thanks?