Roses red

by julie   Nov 14, 2004


Just another self-pitying poem :)

Lurking in the pit of my stomach, hatred slowly thrives,
Crawling all over my heart, stabbing sharp pointy knives.
Life so harsh, life so cruel, my own fairly rotten.
Evil words, nasty grins, faces never forgotten.
Roses red, Violets blue,
All your words untrue.

Judgemental people, Ruining all my life,
Selfish people causing all this strife.
Self-inflicted wounds, and endless tears,
I have realized all my fears.
Roses red, Blood runs black,
Now it\'s gone it wont come back.

They say they are above me, and no lower I can get.
They say they will kill me, and continue with threats.
My pain and hate consume my mind,
My love and content has been left behind.
Roses red, thoughts think gray,
Gently my hope, slowly decays.

Evil. Inevitable, in the end it will conquer us all,
In the end, we are destined to fall.
I\'ve tried to escape, to disappear,
But my pain is too severe.
Roses red violets blue,
Our deaths are nigh, do you feel it too?

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  • 17 years ago

    by jello

    Excellent work. this is really well done. (please read some of mine)

  • 18 years ago

    by Drew Gold

    Not bad,.. not bad at all. my only thought, really is that the only thing ur needing is more complex rhymes.. i dunn0, it just seems like these are all common ones,.. you use colorful language, so that area isnt what's lacking, its just the rhyming.. maybe try multisyllabic rhyming,.. thats always fun to play around with..

    Lurking in the pit of my stomach, hatred slowly thrives,
    Crawling all over my heart, stabbing sharp pointy knives.

    ah what an image! loved it.. it made me visualize bee's buzzing over a honeycombed heart.. maybe add the bees or an allusion to them in a metaphor or something, somehow.. that'd be up to you and your creativity.. good read.. 4/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Sean

    Extremly true message given, with subtle but oddly blunt imagery...well done :)

  • 18 years ago

    by themeuneverseen

    I really loved this poem hun! It was sooo beautiful and flowed great!
    Love alwayz.....
    Haily
    XOXOXOX

  • 18 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    great poem....as you probley guessed...

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