All I can say is wow. lol. that was so innovative and interesting. I have to give people credit that can create poems that really makes a person think and feel. Great work!

Not the best of your poems that I've read so far, but good nonetheless. Good job.

Good poem but it doesn't really flow that well. Seems kinda choppy.

Another totally awesome poem! Grrrr Im getting jealous now! You have too much talent! Im definately adding you to my favourites!
Take care,
Rachelxx

Wow that was realy good.I liked it becouse it was uniqe and made you think.good job

it got a lil confusing when u changed things from future to past but besides that great

Very Sad, And Very Well Worth My Read 5.0! xoxo-Nikki-xoxo

I Think Its Beeaaaaaautiful!!!!And I Would Vote 5.0 Twice If This Computer Would Only Let Me :( Great Write! xoxo-Nikki-xoxo

Nice poem. I liked the whole metaphor.

For all the pain she felt
To others was unknown

I think you might want to fix that part though.

It was pretty good. Nice imagery. keep it up.

wow.. so creative!! i love it! hey, could you check some of mine out.. no one responds to my posts.. so i mite just give up with those.. lol!! i'll keep readin ur stuff!! cuz its awesome!

A bit confusing a times, with regards to past and present tense, and the lack of steady rhythm. Still worth the read though!

Keep Writing
Nici

That was my favourite poem that you had. I loved how you compared the ice breaking to her life.....it was really good!

I love this! I really do. Excellent job hun!

Love much,
Tiff

Great job! i really enjoyed that one!! great and keep it up!! 5/5! it flowed nicely!

I think the idea behind it is great..

But the flow could have been muuuch better, and I think you should consider revising it. Some of the lines were much too long compared to the rest of the poem. And I cannot decided whether there actually is a rhyming shceme there or not..
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But as I said, the thought behind it is great, and I really like how you used the lake as a metaphor.

Very good:)

keep it up

Very wellwritten, I enjoyed it alot, not much else to say really. Perhaps devide it in to paragraphs (think that's the word I should use).

Best wishes,
Patrik

This poem has an amazing concept. your Imagery was amazing. I litterally felt like I was that girl falling through ice.
Amazingly Penned.
A great Read for all.
5/5

Elaine

Your titles are really good at getting attention, I liked this one as well :) this however was really sad :( most poems wont do that to ya but this one did so thanks alot now im going to have to go read something funny
great write though ;)