It's strange how much I relate to this.
I loved the lines you used, they really gave the reader a direct feeling of anger and hatred twords the ill actions of the father. I really liked how you portrayed the betrayl and utter weakness that is felt through such a crime, and I loved the line
"You name your child failure and sinful to shame,"
I love the abuse that line plants in the reader's knowledge of the piece. Excellent job

Thank you, pinkalias. I wish there weren't so many souls out there who could unfortunately associate with this experience. :(

We're sometimes a sad little race, we humans....

This poem will hit home to a number of people, but even though this issue is fairly common, the father is portrayed as alien and distant. Beautiful.

A beautiful scape of a broad and depraved mind.
Your base of description for affection is positively lovely, and your choice of words flow exquisitely.
Bravo~

hey nice poem i like it alot, keep it up

~lil slam~

excellent write, although i can't relate to this directly, it is very truthful. take care...

Wow, this was so excellent! I loved how you wrote it and put it all together. I'm so sorry I haven't been commenting much as of late, I've just been so busy.. but hopefully I'll catch back up with all of your poems! =) God bless & take care!

Very well said..I can't imagine what life is like for people who do not relate to this on some level...It must be amazing....

I am pretty sure I just read my father's life story. It was captivating, and for myself, full of angst. I feel that pain and anger come back when I read these words. Very well written, wonderful theme. I wish I could put it as well as you did in the comments you gave me, but this poem left me speechless.

5/5.

FTS,

This was an incredibly captivating piece, full of emotion and very insightful. Such few words have made me thought about many a thing. Your writing is truly a work of art. This is well beyond poetry, an expression of a truth that ought not be...

Well done on this masterpiece.