A Hopeless Suicide

by Johnny Marlin 2   Jan 13, 2005


Weave a glove
Of twigs and thorn
To fit your mind
You can adorn

Weave your shoes
Out of thin air
To walk along
Without a care

Weave your garments
Of blood and hate
To fuel your madness
And seal your fate

Leave your shelter
With sanity around
Walk to the cliff side
And stare at the ground

What do you see
As you stare down below
Is there hope in your heart
...Can you let it show

If no is the answer
You know what to do
Take a step forward
Into the hopeless blue

If you can say yes
And your honest at heart
You're better than me
And deserve a fresh start

Turn yourself around
And look to the sky
Be thankful for life
God is by your side

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  • 19 years ago

    by Unseen Exposure


    I must admit, I'm not a believer in God, so this poem is a little out of place for me to comment on, but I seemed to enjoy it. Your stanzas are beautiful, and they all flow together really well. I like how you repeated the word "weave" in the first 3 stanzas, it was good use of repetition. I really admire the first stanza ... it set the mood of the poem extremely well. Loved it...

  • 19 years ago

    by Elizabeth Ann

    I would guess that you wrote songs as well?

    The way you separate the versus, hoping that the reader tries to read it through without stopping, so to capture its depth/message.

    I enjoyed your message.

  • 19 years ago

    by pinkalias

    I liked your message and I do have praise for this piece but U have to after the stance,
    "Leave your shelter
    With sanity around
    Walk to the cliff side
    And stare at the ground"
    I thought it got pretty weak. The emotional dcepth and symbols you used after that stance weren't as intriguing and poetic as the beginning.

    HOWEVER
    I absolutly loved how you chose to format and symbolize this piece. The repeating, "weave" I thought was an excellent choice of symbolism and your metaphors and comparisons were really powerful and intriguing. I also liked your message, worthy and beautiful concept to write off of. I really admire the stance,
    "Weave a glove
    Of twigs and thorn
    To fit your mind
    You can adorn"
    Again I just love your choice of symbolism and imagery. It really creates an impact of emotion on the reader of understandning and appreciation for the main subject.

    So, even though I thought it could have been better, Overall I though it was very well written and you have beautiful words.
    Lovely job

  • 19 years ago

    by Amilo

    What an entrancing poem!!! Even though the words you have chosen are simple, they weave intricate images in my mind while reading this. I'm not the one to give such praise and flattery, but this one deserves it!

  • 19 years ago

    by FTS Miles

    This is a wonderful poem, vivacious even as it is melancholic, inspiring even as it is self-deprecative, poignant and wise. Once again, a truly wonderful poem.

    And as an aside, I was extremely happy to see Jason McDowell lives again. :)

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