Comments : A Hopeless Suicide

  • 19 years ago

    by bucky

    wow well written poem ... keep these coming that was good 5/5

  • 19 years ago

    by .x.PorteR.x.

    I really liked this, especially the way you ended it with a choice... very well written, and the rhyming was well sustained... overall awesome work... *5*

    xx, PorteR

  • 19 years ago

    by jennifer

    Amazing as usual.. your poems are always a five.. I love reading them cause they mean so very much.. and they all seem to have all of your emotion in them:)

  • 19 years ago

    by Andrea

    wow, very amazing poem!! you have written it so wonderfully! this poem is very meaningful, i love it! i hope everything is going very good for you!

  • 19 years ago

    by Erica Brown©

    You know how to make a poem depressing now don't you?
    Very nice on the imagery and concept without actually saying something like:
    "Commiting suicide is sad."
    Take care of yourself.

  • 19 years ago

    by Krete

    Another surprise...sheesh McDowell damn good.

    5/5

  • 19 years ago

    by FTS Miles

    This is a wonderful poem, vivacious even as it is melancholic, inspiring even as it is self-deprecative, poignant and wise. Once again, a truly wonderful poem.

    And as an aside, I was extremely happy to see Jason McDowell lives again. :)

  • 19 years ago

    by Amilo

    What an entrancing poem!!! Even though the words you have chosen are simple, they weave intricate images in my mind while reading this. I'm not the one to give such praise and flattery, but this one deserves it!

  • 19 years ago

    by pinkalias

    I liked your message and I do have praise for this piece but U have to after the stance,
    "Leave your shelter
    With sanity around
    Walk to the cliff side
    And stare at the ground"
    I thought it got pretty weak. The emotional dcepth and symbols you used after that stance weren't as intriguing and poetic as the beginning.

    HOWEVER
    I absolutly loved how you chose to format and symbolize this piece. The repeating, "weave" I thought was an excellent choice of symbolism and your metaphors and comparisons were really powerful and intriguing. I also liked your message, worthy and beautiful concept to write off of. I really admire the stance,
    "Weave a glove
    Of twigs and thorn
    To fit your mind
    You can adorn"
    Again I just love your choice of symbolism and imagery. It really creates an impact of emotion on the reader of understandning and appreciation for the main subject.

    So, even though I thought it could have been better, Overall I though it was very well written and you have beautiful words.
    Lovely job

  • 19 years ago

    by Elizabeth Ann

    I would guess that you wrote songs as well?

    The way you separate the versus, hoping that the reader tries to read it through without stopping, so to capture its depth/message.

    I enjoyed your message.

  • 19 years ago

    by Unseen Exposure


    I must admit, I'm not a believer in God, so this poem is a little out of place for me to comment on, but I seemed to enjoy it. Your stanzas are beautiful, and they all flow together really well. I like how you repeated the word "weave" in the first 3 stanzas, it was good use of repetition. I really admire the first stanza ... it set the mood of the poem extremely well. Loved it...