You did a nice job on this poem, watch the capitilization of your "I's" because when you don't capitilize them it detracts from the poem. You're off to a good start, keep writing.

Thank you I will do the I thing thanks.

Very good poem, Flowed well and was a good jod, well done, keep it up xx

The pain inside my frozen eyes
the cold inside the hurt

i didnt get this part

if it was meant to be 'the hurt' it would be better with a comma after 'inside'.

otherwise it would be better to make it sound like this...

the cold inside that hurt

justa suggestion other than it it was a fantastic poem.

take care.

ps. i dont usually critisise poems but i just spotted some potential mistakes that once corrected would perfect ur poems lol :)
take care.

Thanks again hussain i have dun tht to :) I like the fact u can actually tell me and it shows tht u do acually read the poems and don't just skimm them like some people do. Thank you.

This one I like more than some of the others. Keep it up. When you get a chance would you check out some of my poems too? Anyones you want. Peace out.

you have a talent.. i love it!

Alex this is one of ur best I think! Flowed very well! Beautiful and very well written! Take Care! Brooke

Verry good poem. I really like ur poems =)
All that I have looked at are just great! Keep up ur good work ^^

I think This Poem describe how life is today,at least for many.