The rhyming was unqiue, and had a articulate effect on the poem itself. And like all of your poetry, it was beautiful and vivid. Well done.

Hey~
great poem i really like it. Keep writing i love reading ur poems, they'er great.
Bianca
PK

I thought it was quite lovely, I loved your imagery and technique of the format. However, I didn't partake in your use of rhyming. Though I did enjoy the piece, alot of the rhym scheme seemed very cliche and overused-such as,"the impressionable chill of the
starry night;
Her eyes twinkled bright"
I thought that was a line much too overused and unoriginal.
I did though, truly admire the last few lines,
"And as her eyes closed feeling the
warmth from the sun; and the hush
of the wind, Picasso painted 'the dream'
and she waited until the moon licked the lake once more."
I just thought those comparisons were spectacular and beautifully written. Especially the last line, I completly adore it.
overall, Well done

good poem. gave u a 5. :)

Excellent poem, very well written, and I thank you for the comment on mine, it means a lot to me......

Kalika