It's not that it "needs work" it's just that you were pouring out your emotions and in order for them to fit they sort of just spewed. (thhat's not necessarily a critisizm)
the only reason why I say that is because I just think your other works are better, but have no doubt that I think this is quite lovely, and very well written!
I love how your able to take something eating at you and write about it. I love how you used your symbols (as usual) to portray the amount of damage and pain the "friend" is bearing upon you. Lovely job, Well done well done

Excellent poem, i agree with everyone else, you really seemed to put your heart into this poem, and that's what makes this peice amazing. Take care...

It could do with some fine tuning but your poem is still a great write hun - so take that away from yourself. One I could personally relate to in more than one situation in my life, great choice of words I enjoyed this poem very much - Keep writing Luv Eirisa xoxo

very cool poem, i really enjoyed reading it!!!!

*keep writing!!!*