I think the poem has a future, it just needs a little work. BUt i really liek it alot!

loooooooool...u made my eyse roll up...niiiice writing but pleeeeeeeeease put some things like those ,,,,,,,,,,

Lool,u have ur style !!! i like it

Peace
Darla

Loved the whole lost angel theme great work, dark with meaning...Amazing

Thanks for commenting mine, I really loved this poem. Its actually one I can compare my life to. Keep up the good writing, and message me or something.

Very well written, although I can't get over the non-use of comma's and periods. Ah well, I'll get over, the use of it being a short story is very intriguing. Haven't seen that type of style in a while. Keep up the good work ^_^x

IT IS A GOOD POEM!! BUT I THINK THAT YOU REALLY MEANT IT!!! IT SEEMS LIKE YOU WROTE IT FOR THE HELL OF IT!!! BUT KEEP TRYING!!!