very poetic, much more creative than most I've seen...its a great thought!

with love,
Heather.

Though it was too short, (which I give you credit for considering the amount of time it took) I was beautifully written.
Even with it's abrupt length, you were able to concieve lovely symbols and incredible imagery creating a painted detailed outlook of the piece in the form of which you desired. I especially admired the line,
"let bitterness encompass your once luminous heart"
Your word choice is powerful and adds an impactful effect to the piece. Excellent
(don't know why the rating is so low)

very good. keep it up. and thanks foe commenting on my poems means alot to me you know~!!~
xoxox
nida
5/5

Hey, that was great work, but sounds so sad to me. Hope you are ok now. Take care and be safe!

It was short but showed emotion I like reading a poem that u can feel the meaning in it as u read. U could always add on to this if u wanted to take more time to work with it. I think it is good the way it is but might be better if u add to it. Some of the shorter poems can end up being the best. I am not very good I haven't been writing long so I can't really give much advice if u know what I mean. Feel free to check out mine and anwser honest! Thanx

Firstly, it's a sign of utter ignorance that you have the rating you do for this poem.

Second, "hide" being at the end of the second line reads a bit oddly for the flow, though I enjoy the alliteration.

Third, quit prefacing poems with statements about a poem not being great.

Fourth, that said... Amilo, this is a truly beautiful poem. The imagery is tragic, almost heart-rending, and so very, very sublime.

This is poetry.

I wish I had that many pretty words in my vocalbulary as you have. It makes the poems better. short but effectfull!