good write, i like the fact that you did "that, they, that, they. " and kept the repative sort of feeling about it. It was sort of the way that it grabbed me and i noticed it broke so i figured that would be the end. Nice job.

Five/Five

P.S. Thanks for the comment/and or vote on my poem, each one i get i love and cherish so much. Thank you. Wonderful job.

WELL WRITTEN DARK POEM

Excellent poem, take care and I hope to read more soon.