Comments : Invader

  • 19 years ago

    by Gemma Sinead Hayward

    As intense and brilliant as always....

  • 19 years ago

    by Amilo

    Wow... the poem begins with amazing imagery - each line is another vibrant stroke upon a painter's canvas, and by the middle of the poem, you have finished work of art. In this line:

    "Your eyes become intent on mine,
    time and hooves flowing to stillness,
    my world, my divine spark,
    alone cherished in your eyes…

    I can imagine two lovers mounted upon horses, charging down into the valley, ready for battle. With this, you've added a varnish of emotion to the poem as well..

    The last line and first lines, I must say, are my favorites. The first, so eye-catching, and the last, so resounding in tone and meaning.

  • 19 years ago

    by FTS Miles

    Amilo, thank you! That was exactly--I mean EXACTLY--what I was trying to evoke in imagery and tone. You just made my day! Thank you!

    And thank you Gemma and Fred for your comments.

    BTW, good to see you back around, Gemma! :)