Comments : Victory unintentional

  • 18 years ago

    by Leah20

    Really nice job as usual. Usually when rhyme scheme's choppy the poem isn't that great, but with your vocabulary and beautiful imagery, this poem was awesome. Great job!

  • 18 years ago

    by nikki

    brilliant.
    yeah i can't be all detailed like the other people, i just know i loved it and its truly beautiful writing.

  • 18 years ago

    by Carmen

    gosh, that was sad. it didnt rhyme too well, but it was still good.
    p.s- please rate mine

  • 18 years ago

    by Lil Luce

    wow very powerful message! take care
    xxxLoUxxx

  • 18 years ago

    by TrUtH hUrTs

    okk this is for everyone/..poems don't NEED to rhyme...

  • 18 years ago

    by hussain

    poem is really interesting ...open to interpreation i think every1 will have a different idea of this 1 ....i dont know myself what the true meaning behind the poem......got me thinking for a abit....

    great poem! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by ShadowedPhoenix

    This defiantly got me thinking but i loved it and i thought it flowed fairly well and i agree it doesn't have to rhyme to be great and this is a perfect example of that... Loved it!!!

  • 18 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    wow this is a profound write i could easily imagine it as wrritten by a master of the art

  • 18 years ago

    by Samantha

    Definitely should be a solid 5, but some people don't understand this level of poetry and it just goes over their head, then under their feet. Literally.

  • 18 years ago

    by Unseen Exposure


    I commend you for your excellent work. I loved the symbolism and imagry in this piece, as well as your diction. Wonderful job.

  • 18 years ago

    by No Motiv?

    good poem...pretty powerful. I love the rhyming scheme. 4/5

  • 18 years ago

    by AJ

    Confusing, but great. I didn't quite understand it, but yet, I liked it.......

  • 18 years ago

    by Gemmie Lou

    well done hun really deep poem xxxx

  • 18 years ago

    by katie!

    That was a very powerful poem, well done, it worked for me and I loved it, keep it up

  • 18 years ago

    by creasy

    i agree with aj..nice poem.

  • 18 years ago

    by Robert

    Ok I am completely lost the start was good and was good to follow and then somewhere you just hucked it all in the toilet. What were you trying to say here

  • 18 years ago

    by TrUtH hUrTs

    lol okk this poem is about those people who are ready to leave behind their own perspective of life to achieve material success but in the end there is nothing left of their own selves and what they gain or lose means nothing as they are pretending to be something they are not
    the last stanza is the fact that although who are others who might not agree with such a route to success neither of these two types of people know which view is correct although they know that their perspectives are so different only one should be allowed to exist bt since they can't tell which for the moment we all need to coexist.....now do you all get it??(crossing my fingers lol)

  • 18 years ago

    by AllHailTheHeartbreaker

    Interesting and unique in format.
    -Kate

  • 18 years ago

    by Brookeღ

    I agree a poem does not have to rhyme! I was a little lost in the poem! But once I read what u wrote about the meaning I was on the right track! Very unique! Very well done! 5/5 Take Care! Brooke

    I just posted a new one Set Free would love ur opinion! Thanx!

  • 18 years ago

    by *Sherrie*

    This Is So Freaking good...Great work...Ahhhh....I love your style....
    Xox Sherrie