this was a nice poem too but it lacked the whole over view of what you were sorry about it just gave me half the story. Tell me everything or just don't tell me anything. sorry thats the way I feel and your readers will feel the same...

i liked the other u made better the move on one this one is ok tho

WOW! Im amazed.. really wonderful! can relate to it... 5.0... thanx for commenting on mine... check out some more:)

hey, GREAT poem!!! :) its so good. wow!!

Matt

That's so sad..nice write. >3jess

Once again, work on the flow. Something that could help would be putting the same amount of syllables into each line. I liked the idea in this one tool =) Keep writing,
Satuxxa

5/5

I like this one a lot. I can relate to it. Great job, keep this up!!

Love much,
Tiff

nice poem

man o man, another good one! *KISSES*~Corrie

Not much to say about this poem, other than to agree with previous comments and say that it is very well written.

Keep Writing
Nici

Another very well written poem. Somehow I feel your writes get more interesting with every read.

Great poem!! 5/5 definately!!! great job and keep up the AWESOME work!!!

Well written, I liked the subtle way you said things underlying to the whole.

That was a very well written poem! 5/5 great job!

this is wonderful. 5/5
love, Marjan

I can relate to this. Most likely in a different way, but it's still good. Nice job.

christina, This is so wonderful. I loved it. keep it up. lots of love, Marjan

***huggs*** don't be sad! ^_~

pretty good.. it could use a little work... elaborate some more.. put some more emotion into it... you've got the makings for a really excellent poet though! keep it up!
much love
Amanda