Comments : A foundation of sand

  • 18 years ago

    by katie!

    Wow, that is a really elegantly written and powerful poem, it is very intelligent, well done, keep it up, Btw I love the pic on your profile :D

    katie! xxxx

  • 18 years ago

    by AJ

    wow, really good, I like it.
    ~keep it up~
    5/5

    -no more

  • 18 years ago

    by erotema

    this poem speaks in a t.s. eliot style about war, and how the countless men become faceless soldiers without any emotion. once dead, these men are so detached that they are not even missed. also, twenty bonus points go to the person who can figure out where the line "'tis bitter cold, and I am sick at heart" is from.

  • 18 years ago

    by ShadowedPhoenix

    Wow that was defiantly different, it flowed really well and had a unique style, I loved it although it's sad. 5*

  • 18 years ago

    by ** JeNa **

    that was a great poe, u really have talent keep up the good work!!

  • 18 years ago

    by Dorotea©

    Wow, what a heartwreching story! The poem, I must say, was written very well and thoroughly. I'm kind of out of breath after reading that. The message was so powerful. It's sad to think of all those soldiers who fight to death and die without even being remembered. Keep writing,
    Satuxxa
    p.s You're in my favorites by now.

  • 17 years ago

    by Derf K

    Now the drama rising and moving in this poem sweeps the reader along.
    Very effective on the emotional appeal.