Another sweet poem and well worded but the topics you have a so personal that you don't have a true voice Try to write something off the top of your head like how you would view something like fire for exsample. Paint me a picture of fire through words. If you want to be a good poet then learn to expand your way of thinking. Think about it...
wow xcellent poem, it reli gt 2 me cus i can relate so much! thanx 4 ur comments, havent gt round 2 fillin my profile yet lol, im glad u liked my poems it means alot comin frm some1 with soo much talent xxxx 5/5
This one was good, but there are some flaws. For example, the flow is really choppy because some lines are so much longer than the others, and some of the rhymes are very obviously forced. Work on that some more. I liked the idea of forgiveness in this poem, because it shows that you're willing to be there for the person even if they aren't there for you. Keep writing, I enjoyed this poem.