Comments : That Look

  • 18 years ago

    by Dare Id

    Cute one...keep writing!

  • 18 years ago

    by M J U

    A.B..........................anyone who is not "mesmerized" by your work is missing out. Be he, the fool, who will not look at you someday, in that same way. Excellent writing. Still #1 to me.

  • 18 years ago

    by Jesse

    Amanda,

    I loved it. I could relate entirely. Except I am the one starring at someone I can't have. But anyways, loved it as usual. I loved the flow, the words, just everything. I hope you find what you're looking for.

    Take Care,

    Jesse

  • 18 years ago

    by Ann Stareyes

    Amanda,
    You are so gifted. The flow, the words, every line written so well. Loved it my friend.
    hugs, love,
    *Ann*

  • 18 years ago

    by Brookeღ

    That's so sweet I wish I could find that too! You are a very talented writer! Keep it up! Take Care~! Brooke

  • 18 years ago

    by Chris

    Thats by far one of the sweetest poems I've ever read.

  • 18 years ago

    by Forever29

    Beautifully written from beginning to end!

  • 18 years ago

    by Amber

    It's sweet and every other girl dreams of the same thing!

  • 18 years ago

    by HOLLY ARMER

    Beautifully penned, I love this piece! The flow is flawless and your rhymes are natural! These lines are absolutely breathtaking:

    "He gazes at her in utter wonder
    Totally entangled in his fascination"

    The only tip I have is you may want to change this line below:

    "It’s in the passion in his kiss"

    It might sound better if you say:
    It's in the passion of his kiss, just a thought! Keep it up~Holly

  • 18 years ago

    by DooDee

    OH MY GODD ! GIRL U TOTALLY ROCK !!!!!!!!!!!! this poem was sooo amazing and i really loved it :D:D u have great talent ! WAYY TO GO :D
    doodeee

  • 18 years ago

    by silhouette fairy

    I love this poem
    the imagery(sp?)
    it's wonderful