This is really good!! Thanks for the advice...It helped! She knows how I feel!!And she just doesn't care...its like as long as she is happy thats all that matters

good poem, could be longer...

This one is very good...a little bit of advice...put a bit more emotion in in..in the end I can see it but the beginning was a little rough...

Short but with a lot of feeling! Good job! Take Care! Brooke~

Hey, I thought that this was really good, I'm sorry that you feel this way,
Holla bac,
-*AlLiSoN*-

short yet so much emotion has gone into it. great poem 5/5
paulette

no nooo i like short poems..and dis is a nice one..very clear no too convoluted..honest work ..keep it going!!

Good poem! 5/5, you did good.

Lovley poem ^.^
But it need to be longer with a little more emotion

Keep on writing and allways believe.
</3 Erin

Excellent poem! It is really short but it flowed really nicely!!!! 5

great poem, to the point that good and it worked in this poem, been there many times,

i'm amazed at how you can write such a sad poem the one day then zip right into a love poem. Very versitile...

Not your best. Perhaps a little more emotion or suspense. Just a thought.

Short, but great. I can relate to this a lot. Excellent job.

Love,
Tiff

cool poem! i love the ending.. it adds a cool effect like you are watching yourself live! very awesome!
love always,
Abcede :)

Expand, expand, expand. Explore the subject more. Include more emotion. Make the reader feel satisfied. Be creative and original and it could be great. It isn't bad, but it could be better. Take care.

~rolo

This is another awesome poem from u! i like the way it sounds..n i think i could relate to the feeling

nice, short, but powerful. take care.

Wow, an extremely short poem and yet you are able to convey alot in just alittle... Good job, although depressing I enjoyed reading it.

Nice Job....the last line seems a bit forced or I dono something like that...can't quite put my finger on it...but yea...nice job...luv yas mwah

-kayla-